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The days you went away

I woke up at midnight, frightened , holding your photos . The coffee on my desk had become cold. I couldn’t smell any feelings of the past. If you made music

according to my story, I swear that it would be the most miserable melody. Why do you say that promises are made to be broken? But darling, it is undeniable we are defeated by reality. You will never know just one smile from you, It will make my whole world bright However life must go on . Without you, I appreciate flowers. Without you, I enjoy fantastic fictions, Without you, I listen to music which touches my soul, And without you, everything goes on as usual. It seems nothing has happened. But all things you brought to me are in my deep heart. I will keep them for you, Always.

The days you went away

I woke up at midnight, frightened, holding your photos . The coffee on my desk had turned cold. I couldn’t smell any feelings of the past. If you made music according to my story, I swear that it would be the most miserable melody. Why have you said that promises are made to be broken? But darling, it is undeniable we are defeated by reality. You will never know just one smile from you, It will make my whole world bright However life must go on . Without you, I appreciate flowers. Without you, I enjoy fantastic fictions, Without you, I listen to music which touches my soul, And without you, everything goes on as usual.

It seems nothing has happened. But all things you brought to me are in my deep heart. I will keep them for you, Always.

Comment: A love story ends in sorrow. You presented it in a way that readers are able to empathize. By going to some detail aspect of the speaker ’s response to the breakup, and the speaker ’s helpless way of keeping life going on, readers know the whole experience and may relate it to their own. The imageries used are proper. A nice little poem for a beginner. Thank you.

The day you went away

I wake up frightenedly in the dark midnight, holding photos of you. The coffee on my desk has become cold. I couldn’t smell any feelings of the past. If you make music according to my story, I swear that it will be the most miserable melody in the world. Who says that promises are to be broken? But darling, it is undeniable we are defeated by reality. You will never know that just one smile from you, would make my whole world bright However the life must go on, or we have to die. Without you, I appreciate every colorful flower. Without you, I enjoy some fantastic fictions. Without you, I listen to music which touches my soul. Without you, everything goes on as usual seeming like nothing happened. All the things you brought to me are hold in my deep heart. I will keep my love for you. Always.


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