The Battle Against the Haze
姓名：曾同学 学校：山东省德州市第二中学 分数：93
Recently Dezhou has often seen the heavy haze weather, which has done great harm to our daily life. For example, it can
cause traffic accidents because the drivers can't see the road clearly with its existence. Even worse, many people can be severely sick as a result of taking in so much haze. So what can we students do to help with alleviating environmental pollution? Above all,we need raise the awareness of environmental protection and have the courage to call the environment department at 12369 whenever you see someone polluting the environment. Besides, we can save resources like water,electricity and paper in our daily life as much as we can. What's more,our preference of means of transport should be changed, for example,using public transportation instead of private cars. If we do this together, we can win this battle against the evil haze for certain.
【评语】 文章内容充实，条理清晰，文字运用娴熟。段落清晰，语句地道，然而文章有点 小长，最后一段有点拖沓,逻辑上也可以更严谨一点。