授课主题 1.学会审题； 教学目标 2.学会修饰自己的作文。 授课日期及时段 教学内容
美文赏析: Ladies and gentlemen, Good morning. I’m Li Hua from Fujian, Ch
ina. It’s my great honor to be here to say something about the global water shortage and ways of dealing with it. As we know, the global water shortage is becoming increasingly severe mainly due to global warming, environmental pollution and the ever-increasing population. Therefore, it’s high time we did something about it. Firstly, an effective way, I think, is to reserve water in a scientific way for future use. Secondly, new methods need to be developed to use the existing water resources, for example, turning sea water into fresh water. Thirdly, we must stop water pollution by law. Last but not least, it’s everyone’s responsibility to make the best of water, such as recycling and saving water in our daily life. In conclusion, people around the world should be aware of the real situation of water shortage, protect the present water resources and explore potential ones scientifically.
How to polish up your writing? 高考英语作文评分标准 1.本题总分为 25 分，按 5 个档次给分。 2.评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次 的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最 后给分。 3 评分时，应注意的主要内容为：内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准确性、上下文的连贯性及语言的得 体性。 4 拼写 与 标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影 响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写汉词 汇用法均可接受。
考 点 解 析
1.准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容，要点无遗漏 2.应用了较多的语法结构和词汇 3.语法结构和词汇有少许错误，但为尽可能使用较复杂表达方式所致；具备较强的语言应用能力 4.有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑完全达到了预期的写作目的。
1.比较准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容 2.应用语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求 3.语法结构和词汇应用基本准确，少许错误主要是因为尝试较复杂语言结构或词汇所致 4.应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑达到了预期的写作目的。
Ladies and gentlemen, Good morning. I’m Li Hua from Fujian, China. It’s my great honor to be here to say something about the global water shortage and ways of dealing with it.As we know, the global water shortage is becoming increasingly severe mainly due to
global warming, environmental pollution and the ever-increasing population. Therefore, it’s high time we did something about it. Firstly, an effective way, I think, is to reserve water in a scientific way for future use. Secondly, new methods need to be developed to use the existing water resources, for example, turning sea water into fresh water. Thirdly, we must stop water pollution by law. Last but not least, it’s everyone’s responsibility to make the best of water, such as recycling and saving water in our daily life.In conclusion, people around the world should be aware of the real situation of water shortage, protect the present water resources and explore potential ones scientifically.
Content: We should be aware of all the details that must be included in the article. We should make sure that everything we write must be to the point. So I suggest you should do as follows: 1.Analyze the requirements, list all the details that we must write, and make a lot of things clear such as tense, people, background and so on. 2. Brainstorm and try to come up with as many new ideas associated with the content as possible. 3. List the words and expressions as well as sentences patterns that we are likely to use. 4. Organize all the materials and begin the writing.
较高级的词汇、短语 1. I used to like reading and writing poems at middle school.
2. Suddenly I thought of a good idea.
3.You can find my house easily.
4.Because the weather was good, our journey was comfortable.
5.In our school, there are twenty–six classrooms.
6.The old photo made me think of my happy childhood.
高级词汇： 尽量用优美，高级词汇替代简单词汇 Fantastic/wonderful/excellent … 2. 尽量用短语代替单个单词 Be of great value be valuable good
3. 尽量用高级的短语代替简单的短语 Have a preference for sth prefer sth
丰富的语法结构 1. When she heard he had died, she went pale with sorrow.
2. I was walking along Park Road towards the east. At that time, an elderly man came out of the park on the other side of the street.
3. The flat is in a building on Fangcao Street. It is not far from Jianxin Chinese School.
4. He is surprised that the little girl knows so many things. To his surprise , the little girl knows so many things. What surprises him is that the little girl knows so many things. 5. We can achieve our goal only in this way.
6.He did not know what had happened until he had read the news in the newspaper. It was not until he had read the news in the newspaper that he knew what had happened.
倒装句 强调句 省略句 各种从句包括名词性从句，定语从句，状语从句等等 With +N/Pron+宾补 As the saying goes, 谚语 分词结构 独立主格 Compare the following sentences ,and point out which one do you think is an advanced one. 1.A. I like English very much. B. English is my favorite subject. C. I'm crazy about English. 2. A.We should try our best to protect the environment. B.We should spare no effort to protect the environment. C.We should do what we can to protect the environment. 3. A.Although the couple work hard, they are still poor. B.Although the couple work hard, they remain poor. C.Hard as the couple work, they still can't make ends meet.
逻辑角度 ⑴排序关系 ⑵并列关系 ⑶举例关系 ⑷转折关系 ⑸因果关系 ⑹归纳总结 ⑺递进关系
合适的过渡性词汇 first; firstly; second; secondly; last but not least and; too; as well as; along with; together with for example; for instance; like; such as; as to but; however; while; though; on the contrary because; since; thanks to; as a result /consequence (of); thus; therefore in a word; in short; to sum up; in conclusion what’s more; besides; to make matters worse; what’s worse; worse still; furthermore
This village is very small. It has nearly 100 families and about 500 people. It used to be very poor. It has changed a lot since 1978 . People here are richer than before. Now it is taking on a new look.
This village is very small，which has nearly 100 families and about 500 people. It used to be very poor. However, it has changed a lot since 1978 . People here are leading a richer and happier life than before. Now it is taking on a new look.
I think, for us children, we should often go home and stay together with our parents though we are busy. Our society should organize all kinds of activities for the seniors to help them live happily. We can build a harmonious society only when all of us care for the aged.
As far as I am concerned, for us children, we should often go home and stay together with our parents however busy we are. What’s more, our society should organize all kinds of activities for the seniors to help them live a happy life. Only when all of us care for the aged can we build a harmonious society
Directions: Write an English composition in 120 – 150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese. 下图是小学新生的课堂一脚，对照你当时的上课情况，作出比较并谈谈你的感受。你的作文必须包括： ●描述图片里学生上课的场景 ●比较你同时期的上课情况 ●简单谈谈你的感受
例 题 精 讲
Analysis: 1.Requirements: (1)Describe the picture. (2)Compare it with the period when you had lessons (3)Voice your opinions. 2.Tense: simple past tense, simple present tense 3.People: the students, and I 4.Background:
the students’presentation in class.
Brainstorm: In the picture, we can see that … The picture above illustrates that … By comparison… When I was at their age… Have an effect on… Be active in class… Have a strong enthusiasm in Positive attitude towards study… In my view… In my opinion… From my point of view… As far as I am concerned… Take what have been discussed into account, there is no doubt that…
As we all can see, the lovely students in the picture are so active that they all put their hands high, hoping to express their own opinions. It is obvious that the atmosphere is relaxing and everyone enjoys it. That’s great, isn’t it? The picture also reminds me of the time when I was a fresh student who was too shy to speak in public. Just like me, during my class, our classmates just listened to class, and everyone was watching me! I even prayed that my name would never come to my teacher’s mind. But as time goes by, I grow up, so does my mind. I realized that the situation show in the picture was far better. Children are all curious about everything, and knowledge will only be acquired by an inquiring mind. Those who dare not to speak out will never know anything new. The childhood without asking is not a real childhood. We should also keep the curiosity now, and forever. That will benefit you in the rest of your life.
The polished points :
A. 较高级词汇 B.丰富的语法结构 C.恰当使用过渡词或过渡句,使文章结构紧凑 D.段落的优化
1.背诵单词； 2.复习今天的上课内容； 3.完成下列练习。 2008 年上海高考作文 你班将组队参加学校组织的集体舞比赛 （group dancing cooipetition)， 班长希望大家积极参加。 对此谈谈你的看法。 你的文章必须包括以下内容： · 你是否会参加比赛 · 你做出该决定的具体理由 Version 1: A group dancing competition will be held in our school and the monitor calls on everybody to take an active part in it. While most of my classmates are still hesitating whether to participate, I have said yes to our monitor with great pleasure. Generally speaking, there are two reasons for my decision. First, it is a good opportunity for me to relax myself, which
will enable me to study more efficiently. All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy, so goes the saying, which clearly shows us the importance of relaxation. Besides, I think I am a good dancer after learning dance for more than five years. Participating in the contest will be a golden chance for me to show my dancing skills and make some contributions to the class. For the two reasons mentioned above, it is no surprise that I have such a strong enthusiasm on the group dancing competition. Version 2: Today the monitor calls on everybody to take an active part in the group dancing competition which will be held in a couple of days in our school. But after some careful consideration, I have decided not to participate. There are a number of reasons for my decision. First and foremost, as the College Entrance Exam is just around the corner, study is the top priority for me. Participating in the group dancing competition has to give way because it might take me too much time. What’s more, without any experience of dancing, I don’t think I can be a good dancing partner. I am afraid my poor dancing skills will probably spoil the performance of the whole class. In this case, it’s better for me to be a spectator cheering for my classmates. For these reasons, it seems more appropriate for me to watch the competition than to dance myself.
Is the article divided into parts? structure Does each part have a topic sentence? If not, come up with one. Are all the details stated? content If not, add the missing details. Is everything to the point(切题)? Does the writer use any linking words? Are there any mistakes? language If yes, correct them. Is there any advanced vocabulary（高级词汇）? If yes, underline them. Are there any good sentence patterns（句式）? If yes, underline them.